Katie Brenner has the perfect life: a flat in London, a glamorous job, and a super-cool Instagram feed.

Ok, so the real truth is that she rents a tiny room with no space for a wardrobe, has a hideous commute to a lowly admin job, and the life she shares on Instagram isn’t really hers.

But one day her dreams are bound to come true, aren’t they?

Until her not-so perfect life comes crashing down when her mega-successful boss Demeter gives her the sack. All Katie’s hopes are shattered. She has to move home to Somerset, where she helps her dad with his new glamping business.

Then Demeter and her family book in for a holiday, and Katie sees her chance. But should she get revenge on the woman who ruined her dreams? Or try to get her job back? Does Demeter – the woman with everything – have such an idyllic life herself? Maybe they have more in common than it seems.

And what’s wrong with not-so-perfect, anyway?

My Rating: 4-Stars

A Reader’s Take:

I’ve been a longtime fan of Sophie Kinsella. In fact, I’m pretty sure I’ve read every one of her novels. And though I enjoyed this book, as with much of her latest work, I felt like this one could have had a little more of what I call the “giggle factor.” In other words, the same level of amusement I came to expect from her earlier work. Even after all these years, I can still pick up one of her first novels—say, “The Undomestic Goddess”—and laugh out loud while reading. Even so, I really liked this story. It was light, but well thought out and with a much-needed message regarding social media that hummed along to the tune of “A-person’s-life-doesn’t-have-to-be-perfect-to-be-good.” A must-read for all those who often find themselves scanning through Facebook or Instagram and thinking: “Compared to others, my life sucks!

A Writer’s Take:

Characterization: A book character’s motivations and personality traits should always line up with her or his actions. People don’t do things “just because”.

Katie-Cat was a fun and evolving character, one I rooted for wholeheartedly throughout the story. Her actions lined up perfectly with her age and insecurities as a country-girl-come-to-the-big-city. But she also kept me guessing. I wasn’t sure up until the very end whether she would choose to go back to the city or stay in the country.

Alex too was an interesting character, a successful man who had been raised with privilege and what appeared to be every advantage, yet his upbringing turned out to be more of a hindrance than a leg-up. He was smart and sexy, with a touch of vulnerability that made him entirely endearing.

Instead of simply describing the physical attraction between these two characters, Kinsella did a great job of slowly developing their romance and showing the reader how and why their differing pasts actually gave them a lot in common and allowed them to fall in love.

Then there was Demeter. With her perfect career, family, hair and clothes, she was essentially everything Katie had always dreamed of becoming. I loved her and how her scattered creativity caused her futile efforts at being in charge to backfire on her. (Full disclosure: I think she’s my spirit animal.) I also liked the way Kinsella made us hate her at first before turning the table by making her our ally.

And we can’t forget about Mick and Biddy. They were quirky and lovable, the glue that held this story together and made it work.

Pacing: As writers, we often have so many great ideas for our stories that we have a hard time deciding what to keep and what to cut. And who could blame us? Once we’ve worked hard on a scene and it’s brilliant, it’s much too disheartening to let it go. Nevertheless, we should be careful to include only the material that is vital to the plot. Otherwise, the story will drag as readers ask themselves: “Is this scene necessary to the story?”, which may well lead them to start skimming.

Parts of this story dragged for me. Because some of the scenes seemed to be conveying similar information, it felt to me as though they could have been combined and/or deleted. Especially toward the end, where the author took a few too many chapters to sum up the story and let the reader know what would become of Katie and Alex.

Punctuation: Exclamation points are a great way to show excitement or anger, but they should be used sparingly. I’ve even heard editors caution to use only one exclamation point per chapter, certainly only one per page. Otherwise, it appears as though the characters are at a constant state of heightened emotion, which either becomes exhausting to the reader and/or causes the exclamation point to lose its oomph.

In this novel, Kinsella went a little crazy with the exclamation points, sometimes using up to five on a single page.

Descriptives: Authors should take care not to repeat descriptive words or phrases over and over again. The longer the book, the harder it gets to come up with ways of showing similar expressions and physical displays of emotion. But paying attention to how often we recycle the same descriptions is essential to crafting a creative and well-written novel.

Here, the author reused many words, like wry and twinkle, throughout the entire book and sometimes within pages of each other.

Overall, this novel may not have been as funny as some of Kinsella’s others, but it was an extremely entertaining read.

Enjoy!

Review Edited by Donna Kenney

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After sixty years of marriage and five daughters, Lynn “Lovey” White knows that all of us, from time to time, need to use our little white lies.

Her granddaughter, Annabelle, on the other hand, is as truthful as they come. She always does the right thing—that is, until she dumps her hedge fund manager fiancé and marries a musician she has known for three days. After all, her grandparents, who fell in love at first sight, have shared a lifetime of happiness, even through her grandfather’s declining health.

But when Annabelle’s world starts to collapse around her, she discovers that nothing about her picture-perfect family is as it seems. And Lovey has to decide whether one more lie will make or break the ones she loves . . .

My rating: 3-stars

A Reader’s Take:

If you’re a fan of Southern fiction and you relish novels dripping in southern isms, with characters who bring proper southern living to life, while highlighting the importance of forgiveness and strong family ties, you’ll probably love this book. The writing style was good. The voice was fine. The characters were vivid and well drawn. And while I also appreciated the way the author began each chapter with a piece of advice from a former generation, I only moderately enjoyed this story. Why? I guess it was because the plot was too predicable and could have been a smidge more compelling as well. Plus, a few technical issues kept pulling me from the story. There was an unexpected twist about three-quarters of the way through but it didn’t add enough intrigue to have me anxiously turning pages.

Nevertheless, when all was said and done, this story was sweet and romantic and fun.

A Writer’s Take:

Plot: Writers need to be careful when structuring a story to ensure that the plot will consistently move forward a good pace. Because both Annabelle and Lovey’s stories were mostly told in flashback mode, the plot inked along as if struggling against a stiff breeze. For most of the book it felt like I was stuck in a strange sort of limbo, where things were happening but there was no forward motion. I get that Lovey and Annabelle’s lives were being somewhat paralleled, and that Lovey must look back on her life to do so, but with so much of Annabelle’s present-day life being told in flashbacks as well, the combination caused the story to drag along.

Then there were also many places where I stopped and thought: wait, what just happened? It was like certain links in the plot chain had simply been removed. Like once the book was finished and edited there were too many words, and so someone—a senior editor most likely—went through and trimmed a bit. As with a person addicted to plastic surgery, so goes book editing. Too many nips here and tucks there, and suddenly things don’t quite line up anymore, don’t flow naturally.

Character Development: Though book characters are fictional they MUST have clear, believable, and real-life motivations. The men in this book were way to whooped for my taste and fawning all over Annabelle like pack of male dogs circling the only female on earth currently in heat. Don’t we women want a man with a little mystery? The hint of a chase in the very least?

Ben, in particular was a LOT too sappy. I know some women dream of hearing that kind of flattery, of having such an amorous man narrow his sights on her. But do we really, truly want that? REALLY? In my experience, any man who professes his love so freely and nauseatingly often is definitely up to something nefarious. Ahem!

Additionally, the lengths to which Holden was willing to go in order to win back Annabelle’s heart suspended the imagination. No man with any ounce of breeding and/or self-respect would ever make such a fool of himself, public or otherwise.

Then there was Priest Charming. He was okay but his general lack of character flaws made me suspicious. In fact, if I were to write a sequel to this book, I would reveal that Priest Charming is not Mister Perfect at all but a sociopathic serial killer. How’s that for a plot twist?

And what about Annabelle herself? Besides the fact that she was blonde and thin and a stylish dresser, I don’t understand why all three of these men were so enamored with her. She didn’t possess any quirky or redeeming personality traits, wasn’t particularly clever or amusing, nor did she commit any acts of heroism, like saving a family of baby ducks from a storm drain or any such thing. So what was her over reaching appeal? Are we to believe that all three of these men were really that shallow? And if so, that lack of depth should have made them all the less appealing to readers.

Grammar: The unnecessary use of adverbs can be a problem for many writers. Now, I’m not an adverb Nazi. On the contrary, I find adverbs vital to a well-written novel. When used properly, adverbs add beauty and flow. However, with regards to adverb use, writers need beware.

Warning: When constructing dialogue tags, authors should exercise extreme caution before inserting an adverb. Doing so needlessly might suggest laziness and/or a lack of ability on the part of the author.

Setting: Don’t hit the reader over the head with setting. The reader should feel as though she or he is immersed in the story, not sitting back as silent observer. I realize that southern fiction is a popular trend—I’ve even written a few myself—but I prefer to see the culture subtly woven into the story, speech and mannerisms of the characters rather than standing out from the story as it did in this book. At times it almost felt like I was reading a how-to manual on living in the south.

Personally, I don’t get the obsession with romanticizing the south at all. Don’t get me wrong, I’ve lived below the Mason Dixon Line for more than twenty-five years and I absolutely love it down here. But what most people don’t understand is that living in the southeast isn’t all garden parties and mimosas. There’s another side, a more prominent, less glamorous side, to living down here, which includes but is not limited to:

#misquotes #wasps #ticks #chiggers #snakes #hotsweatymess #noseyneighbors #pollen #wafflehouse #rednecks

But then I suppose no one wants to read about any of that.

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I finally completed my rewrite of the Holly book and it’s FINALLY for sale on Amazon!

The story about how fate will carry us where we need to go whether we are willing passengers or not.

A year and a half after being jilted not once, but twice by the only woman he’s ever truly loved, Brian McAlister has all but given up on relationships. Then, on special assignment for the DA’s office, he steps into the middle of a politically sensitive murder case where he crosses paths with a beautiful ex-socialite-turned-social-worker, Holly Cavanaugh Winter.

Widowed, practically penniless, and reduced to shopping at Walmart, Holly is dreading the approaching holiday season. However, her angst isn’t due to her husband’s untimely death the previous December 25th, but to a secret that could reveal itself unless she can find a way to avoid the coming Christmas. To make matters worse, she unwittingly stumbles into the throes of Brian’s case and the manhunt for a killer who now has his sights set on her.

His case unraveling, Brian finds himself tasked with keeping Holly and her two daughters safe while bringing an assassin and the powerful man who hired him to justice.

 

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